The Calamitous Bob 44: Progress
Added 2021-04-12 12:24:37 +0000 UTCA short one this time.
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Sorry most individual chapters before 60 were posted without proofreading from beta readers. The larger documents should be cleaner.
Mecanimus
2021-07-29 10:05:09 +0000 UTCat the target practice, you put viv when you meant to put Marruk I think. Second line. Viv looked down towards Kazar to see a standing target made of a stone held up by several logs. Viv stood nearby, hands on her waist and wheezing quite loudly. Viv whistled, and the stout Kark gave a sign and moved away.
fbt
2021-07-29 07:20:40 +0000 UTCYeah probably blue boxes are a mess
Mecanimus
2021-07-15 16:17:44 +0000 UTCThankx for chapter. One question in chapter 35 hand to hand combat advanced 6, here Apprentice 6. A mistake?
Valentin Chibiriak
2021-07-15 14:51:21 +0000 UTC“Solfis and Varska agreed that most adults plateaued at the low twenties in values that had a limited impact on their stats.” This is a bit unclear
lenkite
2021-07-04 05:35:22 +0000 UTCwell then, i noticed: "Viv looked down towards Kazar to see a standing target made of a stone held up by several logs. Viv stood nearby, hands on her waist and wheezing quite loudly. Viv whistled, and the stout Kark gave a sign and moved away" Viv stood nearby, shouldn't it be Maruk? "Her Focus and Acuity had rosen by two [...]" rosen, risen? I'm no native so can't say for sure. Thanks for the chapter!
RageBone
2021-04-12 19:32:12 +0000 UTCThe task was completed as juggling several equations at the same time. -> The task was complicated as juggling several equations at the same time.
Dlor
2021-04-12 16:55:24 +0000 UTCThank you!
Andrew
2021-04-12 14:02:59 +0000 UTCProbably has a few typos sorry
Mecanimus
2021-04-12 12:33:07 +0000 UTC
