Sidis teaser
Added 2023-03-23 08:56:15 +0000 UTCA new demon was born on the plains of Sidis. It
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Another story I was reading a while back, Reincarnated Demon Princess, or something like that. It has a similar start, demon gets born in the demon realm and manages to escape by reincarnating into the mortal world. Ends up in the body of a princess, evil ensues.
Kennyevilmonkey
2023-04-01 20:28:53 +0000 UTCfwliw, I prefer Changling to Sidis.
fbt
2023-04-01 20:16:54 +0000 UTCactually, there's another demon story on RR that I'm struggling to find again that starts very, very similarly (lol, it was Salvos, it's been awhile). Man, there are a lot of demon stories, I hadn't realized how many.
fbt
2023-04-01 20:16:13 +0000 UTCSomewhat grimdark-ish too but it seems like there is a decent rate of improvement which helps things a whole lot in terms of story tone and character growth. He is still primitive but is growing fast so another chapter or 2 will get him above caveman style thought.
tibbish
2023-03-24 07:48:17 +0000 UTCMeh evolution stories always start soooo slow. The "friend on your shoulder" is always a concept, that I like. Teaserwise Changeling is better, because there is more interaction with others and less "he than did that and than that", but I see potential in this one too.
NoReTr3aT
2023-03-23 17:57:16 +0000 UTCI find the introductory paragraphs a bit oddly dense compared to the rest. Beyond that I am happy you showed a bit of mental development or I would be out. I am quite curious but compared to the Changeling it gives a weaker impression.
Adurna
2023-03-23 17:53:13 +0000 UTCReminds me alot of Salvos, I like it.
Kennyevilmonkey
2023-03-23 17:48:48 +0000 UTCDang, I like this story too. If it wasnt a choice between this and the shadowpunk one I would be eager to see more. As is I hope to see more of this After that one.
Aclys
2023-03-23 17:23:51 +0000 UTCWill have to reread this one. Still lost as to where it is going but it was a good journey along the way. Had some laughs as well. "...it truly was a great stone. Very murderery." π Still, Ekko above comment put a few things in place and gave me a better idea of what I just read, but also cemented that I wasn't completely lost as to what I was thinking this story is about. lol Now the real question is... was what was written so far, make able to care about what comes next for this character? And if I were to answer now, in my semi confused state, I would say no, not really. This story seems to be in deep fantasy with next to no reference to anything modern, earthly or human-based. Maybe we will learn more once he/she/it remembers more about itself, but right now we might as well be describing middle earth, and a deep deep fantasy isn't what im personally looking to get into right now. Urban fantasy or alternate reality, Rebirth/Reincarnation is more of what I am looking for right now. But if I was looking, i'd give this one a shot. NP. π»
RonGAR
2023-03-23 17:04:25 +0000 UTCThis is weird and interesting!
elijah pickett
2023-03-23 16:36:44 +0000 UTC> Of course, the bord would taste vile. It looked vile and smelled vile. bird > This one was no whelp but a grown individual like the curious one. It looked a little feeble and clearl hungry. clearly
Yshua
2023-03-23 15:03:59 +0000 UTCA demon that's lived in the past and the fragment of an angel seems pretty cool, but looks like the other ones gonna win sadly
Isiah Debarros
2023-03-23 12:00:03 +0000 UTCI really want to read more of the world. It is fascinating. I hope this what you decide to go for.
Viktor D victorious
2023-03-23 10:29:18 +0000 UTCHuh so I'm the first to comment...cool. So a known concept (kind of), our MC is a demon that just got born and we follow their path to greatness. First of "the curious one" is a pretty cool character, even though he is lacking in the mental departement atm. The vibe I get of it/him is of a child with animal instincts, but in a very entertaining fashion. The random wizard encounter was kinda hilarious and in standard Mecanimus fashion, the description were delicious. Like the way the voice of the narrator sounds omniscient in some moments and in others very personal. Like the narrator of Ari in Journey, sounds different to the narrator of Viv in Bob and know it sounds different for the curious one. And I fucking love it. So back to this teaser, I think it started great but really became good through the addition of Anuwa. Through her the world opened up and we can already see the greater outline of the world we witness and most importantly we get that sweet, sweet dialogue we were missing. The dialogue fleshes out both characters and is incredibly fun to read. So 10/10 start for this work and now I'm gonna read the other teaser
Ekko
2023-03-23 09:56:20 +0000 UTC
